Telling Writing/ Word Choice/ CC list

The once sugary, kind, old Mrs. Clause has been kidnapped and replaced with her body snatcher double. The same clothes, a blood red velvet floor length dress with matching cap, are still worn. However, there is one large difference. The new Mrs. Clause loves dogs as much as a lion loves gazelle. Earlier today her bloodied form was seen in her small rustic kitchen. Her hands and mouth were dripping with the candy apple red of the dogs blood, small specks of which has landed on her glasses. Her ice blue eyes were filled with a wild hunger, for the sickly sweet taste of blood, human blood.

It was a cool, frigid winter day and Santa, the always efficient man that he is, had just come in from a long day in the shop. As he walked in the small cottage he and Mrs. Clause shared, he could feel something was off. He had noticed the offness ever since Mrs. Clause had come home from her trip to Zombie Land. He could never put his finger on just what was off, but there was something different about his sugary, sweet wife, something... almost deadly off. Shaking off his feelings of offness he slowly shuffled into the small kitchen where he could hear his lovely wife making another deliciously decadent supper. As he quietly poked his head around the corner, as if not to disturb her Mr. Clause saw something he never envisioned in his craziest dreams. Standing in the center of the small, rustic kitchen was Mrs. Clause, hands and mouth dripping with the candy apple red color of blood. The entire kitchen smelled or iron and Santa could now see the many dog bodies, drained of their blood all around the small kitchen. Santa gagged, he just couldn't believe what he was seeing, he refused to believe what was being presented in front of his eyes. Suddenly, Santa could hear a small noise. He peeked around the corner again to see that Mrs. Clause was singing to the small dog in her bloodied hands. As Santa watched in amazed horror Mrs. Clause wrapped a small velvet bandage around the dogs tiny waist where an entire piece of the small white poodle was missing, cleaned away the blood from the whimpering puppy, and put him in a tiny padded bed next to the tiny grey stove where several other small poodles were laying. Santa looked around the room, trying to find some sort of answer to the question of what his wife was doing. He continued to watch as Mrs. Clause turned suddenly and pulled a small white blob out of her dress pocket. As Santa watched the blob came to life, growing fangs the size of pens. He fell back against the rough wall of the cottage. He couldn't believe his wife had brought an abominable snowball into their house. Santa slapped his head in recognition. Of course that's why the dogs were bit! Abominable snowballs loved the taste of dog flesh. After catching his breath, and regaining composer he shuffled further down the tiny hallway to the bedroom he and his still sweet wife shared.

Telling Writing 1

I was pulled from the sweet tendrils of sleep by the soft, serene, and gentle humming of my alarm clock. Groggily, I tapped in the code to make the singing quiet. I rolled out of my dark, warm cocoon and staggered over to my dresser. Gazing sleepily into the over-sized mirror I realized I had an AP Bio quiz in a matter of four hours! Hurriedly I ran up the steps, taking two at a time, racing the clock. After my all to short time in the boiling hot water of the shower, I went to study quickly. However, just as I was devouring my textbook, my ride appeared in the driveway signalling it was time to head to school. I grabbed my boulder sized backpack, and I ran out the door into the frigid morning air of winter.

Example List and CC Comma Sentences

List Comma Sentences

The Labrador is the most popular breed of dog by registered ownership in Australia, Canada, New Zealand, the United Kingdom, and the United States (since 1991).

It is also one of the most popular assistance dog breeds in Australia, Canada, the United Kingdom, and the United States and many other countries, as well as being widely used by police and other official bodies for their detection and working abilities.

Typically, Labradors are athletic and love to swim, play catch and retrieve games, are good with young children, elderly, and for protection.

CC Comma Sentences

I love you, but I can not marry you.

I want to go to the store, and I want to go to her birthday party.

He had not known her long, yet he felt very close to her.

writing sample

During the summer of 2011 I was hired to work with the Fish and Wildlife Service as an intern during their hectic summer months. I then spent the duration of my summer pulling out barbwire fences, uprooting invasive plant species, and learning a whole lot about things I never knew excited. Getting the chance to see first hand how hard it is to maintain native grasses was really eye opening. Learning how to recognize the bad plants from the good plants and how to help keep prairies at equilibrium was really a life changing experience. It showed me an entire new field I could, literally, explore. Not only did I get to know some interesting and exciting new people I got the opportunity to meet new plants, animals, and ways of life. It was really exciting being out in the prairies everyday, no matter how hot it was or how tall the grass was. That summer was one of the most exciting summers of my life. It also, helped me learn a lot about not only prairies, but an ecosystem almost lost at the hands of people.